Flashback

Welcome to a very wet and windy WIPpet Wednesday.  Well it is here in the UK anyway! 😦  Or at least the sun is shining now but it’s been horrible all day until now.  Anyway for this week’s WIPpet Wednesday I thought I’d share with you one of the many  flashbacks that my MC Anna has in Reunion of the Heart.  For the 12th February I’m sharing 12 lines from chapter 2.

In the present, Anna is at her school reunion and she and best friend Melissa have just been reunited with their school friends Lizzie and Rachel who they haven’t seen since school.

In this excerpt, in the flashback, you can catch a glimpse of why they fell out at school and hadn’t made up until now, many years later. I’m not going to say too much more than that.  So without further ado, here’s my contribution to this week’s WIPpet Wednesday:

‘What the hell do you think you’re playing at?’ Melissa had demanded of Lizzie, marching up to where she was sitting eating her lunch at the edge of the school playing fields and tapping her on the shoulder.  Anna was trailing in her wake.

‘I’m sorry, but when did you become the boss of my life?’ Lizzie had replied.  ‘Oh yeah, that’s right, you’re not!’

‘You know what Matt’s like, you know he’s a nasty bastard who’s given our friend hell and yet you still choose to start seeing him.’

‘It’s my life; I can do what I want!’  Lizzie retorted.  ‘And anyway, when are you ever going to let Anna speak for herself?  There she is, cowering behind you…’

‘I’m not cowering,’ Anna said in a quiet voice.  ‘But Melissa’s right, I do have a problem with you dating Matt.  He’s made my life miserable for five years of secondary school.’ 

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Thanks goes to the most gracious hostess of them all K. L. Schwengel.

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34 thoughts on “Flashback

  1. Boys: forever a source of drama among adolescent girls. I like this because it’s not the typical “they both like him” scenario. This is much more complex. What should a girl do if her crush is a mean kid? No easy answers.

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    • Glad you found it complex. That means I’m doing a good job! And you’re right – there are no easy answers. Lizzie is having to choose between her friend and the boy she wants to go out with. Anna feels betrayed – Matt has given her so much grief over the years.

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    • Well I’m glad I’ve answered some questions for you! It is a tough situation, but Anna and BF Melissa go away from it really glad they went because it’s given them a chance to start over with their old school friends.

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  2. Excellent high school voice going here. What a traumatic time the teenage years are! So much drama. You build the tension very well and draw Anna’s character through the others. Nice.

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    • Ah thanks Kathi. Isn’t school ****? Fill in the blank!! It was for me anyway lol. I enjoyed the learning but the other pupils… well let’s just say I was glad to see the back of them!! Glad you appreciated the excerpt. 🙂

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  3. The sad truth is, I’m not quite sure I don’t feel more sorry for Lizzie as opposed to Anna. Instead of seeing this as a chance to possibly get Matt off their backs by being besties with his girlfriend, they’re forcing Lizzie to choose “us or him”. It definitely adds a new element to Anna and Melissa’s characters, and that’s great… no one likes the too perfect protagonist.

    On a more technical note, I felt Melissa’s “You know what Matt’s like…” statement felt a bit stilted. Like she’s saying everything explicitly so the reader gets the backstory….

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    • That’s interesting that you say you feel sorry for Lizzie. I have to say I don’t but you have a point. Growing up isn’t easy for anyone and sometimes the choices people make are tough ones. Thanks for your comment. 🙂

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      • I’ve got more distance from your characters than you do, Elaine. It give me a different perspective. (I’ve also got Libra Rising, so I tend to always play the Devil’s Advocate.)

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    • That’s definitely true Eden. In some ways it can sometimes be hard as an author to really see our characters as they are from up close. We put so much energy into creating them that it’s often a surprise when readers notice things about them that we haven’t perceived before.

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