This has got to be quick because I’m really tired this evening. I’ve had a busy day what with my exercise class this morning and lots of proofreading work this afternoon. (Yes I am cheating and posting this on Tuesday evening!!)
Anyway for my contribution today I thought I’d share with you a revamped version of what you read last week. Because I had a lot of comments that people assumed from what I’d written that it wasn’t a good meeting, I’ve changed it so that it reads in a more positive way.
The two friends from school Anna and Melissa are meeting for the first time in many years are called Lizzie and Rachel. And it IS a good meeting, although they didn’t part well when they left school.
In line with it being the 14th August I’m giving you 14 lines (from chapter 2 – cos I can!). Enjoy!
‘Anna!’ She turned to see Lizzie and Rachel standing there. Melissa had turned around too and for a moment the four school friends said nothing, just remained standing there staring at each other. Anna’s old friends still looked much the same, but a little older.
Neither of them were as slim as Anna remembered them being but she thought their curves suited them. And their hair was lovely too. Lizzie’s blonde locks were swept up in a chignon, whilst Rachel’s dark hair which Anna remembered as being very long and hanging down her back was now cut in a chic sharp bob.
They looked delighted to see Anna and Melissa, with grins spread across their faces.
‘It’s so good to see you, Anna,’ Rachel said beaming.
‘Thank you,’ she said. ‘You too.’
‘How are you both?’ Melissa asked. ‘It’s been so long. What are you girls doing these days?’
So there you have it. Please let me know if that’s any better, I really appreciate your comments. 🙂
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