Well it’s nearly the end of Wednesday and I’ve been so busy I haven’t had time to participate yet, but I’ve got just about enough time left to post my contribution to this week’s WIPpet Wednesday. I thought that seeing as I’ve put my current WIP on hold to revise my previous WIP, which I’m hoping to publish soon, I’d post a section of the previous one. It’s called ‘The Inheritance’ and it’s about two daughters, one wise daughter and one foolish daughter. It’s loosely based on the Prodigal Son, a parable Jesus tells in the Bible. Here’s the opening 17 lines (approximately), seeing as it’s the 17th today. Enjoy!
Emma was perched on a hay bale in the barn. Green rolling hills that she’d known all her life banked up in the distance. She watched her sister, barely able to disguise her irritation. Kate was sitting on another hay bale a few feet away, attempting to untangle her blonde curly hair with her fingers.
It was a permanent mess. Emma had the same slender figure, blonde curly hair and blue eyes as her sister, but her hair was always styled neatly. Why don’t you just cut it all off and start again? Emma wanted to say. Kate looked up at her with a disapproving expression on her face.
‘I don’t see why you can’t just stay here and wait until you’ve decided what you want to do with your life,’ she said.
‘But you would say that, wouldn’t you? You’ve always wanted to stay exactly where you are now, stuck on this farm,’ Emma said.
‘Yes, I love the farm. I’m happy here. The reason you want to leave is because you’re so restless. Take your clothes for instance. You update your look every five seconds.’
‘Well at least I have good taste in clothes,’ Emma said. ‘Look at you, Kate. How long have you had those ripped jeans? No, don’t tell me, you got them when you were fifteen and you’ve worn them ever since.’
If you would like to take part in WIPpet Wednesday, simply post a sample of your current work in progress on your blog which relates to the date in some way, so today being the 17th I’ve posted 17 lines from my work. Then just add your post to this link. Thanks to K.L. Schwengel for hosting. And my special thanks goes to my good friend Kate Frost who’s read ‘The Inheritance’ for me and has given me loads of great advice for improving on it!